I was thinkin about this last night while i was watching blue crush and i asked my self this would be better if MR character would face off against Kate bosworths character. so here it is and this time MR character falls in love, i'll try to come up with more of the story later.

Chapter 1:
(1 year later)
Anamaries pov:I was so tired from all those contest i had done i just wanted some sleep. I was driving up to the drive way when i saw the lights were still on and i looked at the clock and it was 2:00 in the morning I automatically thought penny was having another party or she was still doing her hamework.I walked into the house and saw that penny was asleep at table with a math book under her I laughed a little and thaught to my self home sweet home nothing has changed.I picked up penny and carried her to our room thats when I heard Eden laughing and I saw lena in front of the room door sleeping. I heard Eden laughing again and this time it was pretty loud and woke up penny and lena. they just looked up at me and Iwas about to ask them why they weren't sleeping in the room
when all of a sudden the door opens and I see a man walk out and say sorry to penny and lena for making them sleep on the floor. i just kept on staring at him until Eden came out and she walked him to the door and they gave each other a kiss on the lips. Lena and penny just go into the room as if nothing happened when Iheard the shut I just looked at Eden and she looked back at me and said welcome back.

I like your story so far. I haven't read a lot of Blue Crush fanfiction so this is a nice change. Keep writing.

chapter 2:
(5:00 a.m. the same day)
[B]Edens pov:
Anamarie woke me up pretty early but she was careful not to make to much noise to wake up penny and lena. We went outside and sat down on the couch i'm still wondering why she woke me up so early and then she cought me dozing off and she asked me"who was that guy who left the house a couple of hours ago" i'm just looking confused and tired i thought I told her about him a couple of months ago then it hit me it wasn't her I told it was someoe else so I just answered her" his name is John and we met a couple of months ago" she looked mad at me and I could tell why she did'nt like people hiding things from her so I told " I ment to call you but time just flew by I one day you were here the next you were gone so I decided to spend my time preparing for the next contest and thats when I met John"she just kept looking at me so I kept telling her more about how I meet John"Me and penny were having this party and I guess it was getting to loud because the cops were called they knocked at our door I answered and said can I help you the officer told me if we could turn the music down so I told penny to turn it down and asked if that was it he didn'nt answer and he had this nervious look on his face so I asked him to come in and join the party he walked in and we went to the room to talk.""he was still pretty shy so I started the conversation I told him my name was Eden and he told me his name was John. I guess the time just flew by because when I went to check what time it was it was 5:00 in the morning and so I told him if he wanted to met later on he said yes and thats how it all began."I was about to continue when anamarie asked me something"do you love him?"I was quick to answer"yes were getting married in a couple of months" now she looked even more surprised and asked me"does penny and lena know your getting married?"I looked at her and told her "no, he askedme this morning so I guess your the first one to know." I can tell she was happy now because she gave me ahug and said"thankyou for telling me first."

Honestly, I had the exact same thought....that IF by the tiny factionish miniscule of a chance they made a sequel, it should be Eden falling in love and kicking some surfing ass. Hell, Ebert even said the same damn thing!

Anyway, good start. :)

[B]chapter 3:
(same day but a couple hours from before)
penny's pov:
Iheard laughing outside then looked at the clock to see what time it was it was about to be 8:30 and i realized I had to get ready for school.Ater I took a shower I that everyone was awake now and talking in the kitchen"hey guys whats up"I asked them as I grabbed a peice of toast to eat"it's about time you wake up girl"said Eden"well maybe if you didn'nt hog the room yesterday we could have went to sleep earlier" lena said laughing. Anamarie just kept looking at them and smiling I could tell she missed being home and we all missed her."so penny are ready to go to school"anamarie asked"I guess" I said"chear up girl your not going to school today your going to come to the beach and help me practise for the contest thats coming up in a couple of months."I was surprised when Eden said this anamarie just looked at her and said"she has to go to school Eden someone has to go to college."everyone just luaghed when she said this"why do I have to go school I mean you did'nt go to college and now your famouse."I said ."i'm not famouse" "yea you are your like in every cover for sufer magizine""penny maybe you should just get your stuff so we can go to the beach and practise"Eden said trying to me and anamarie from fighting "she going to school Eden so stop telling her to get her stuff ready""i was just saying so.."before Eden could finish what she was going to say lena spoke"maybe we should just calm down you guys and get penny to school""your lena penny go get your stuff so we can drop you off"anamarie said "i'm not going " i yelled "get your stuff now penny I'm not playing""i'm not going Eden come back me up on this""anamarie cant she just stay home this once" eden said trying to calm anamarie down but it did'nt work"she's going to school and thats it"thats when anamarie grabed my arm and pulled towards the car I'm yelling "let go of me"and Eden and lena are just telling anamarie to calm down and to let me go but anamarie was'nt paying any attention to them. thats when out of no where Eden comes and tackles anamarie to the floor and with that all three of us feel but I was finally free of her grip on my arm" what the hell are you doing Eden get off me "not until you calm down"I said get off me now!" anamarie then pushed Eden off her and told that she wnted her to move out because she was a bad influence on me. With that Eden just went inside the hous and started packing all her things she called someone on the phone and she went outside and waited for the person to pick her up. when i finally saw that it was John I went over to Eden and helped her put her stuff in his car thats when she told something i'll never forget" Penny your a smart girl and I hope you live a happy life."she also told me" if I ever feel like getting away from anamarie I was always welcome to come and visit her and John oh and one more thing tell anamarie i forgive her and she's still invited to my wedding you and lena are also invited and I would like to ask you to my maid of honor." I told i would be and then she left.

any comments or any suggestion on how you think this story should dont be afraid to tell me.

Spacing. Definitely....it's coming out all as one big paragraph and it makes it kinda hard to read ya know? Don't hate me. :D

thanks for sugestions and sorry for not spacing.I hope this better and easier to read sorry again.

Chapter 4:
(cuople of months later,and Edens wedding day.)
Anamarie's Pov:

When I woke today I knew what day it was and thought of going to Eden's wedding just kept going threw my head I knew she wanted me their but I felt so bad after not talking to her ever since I kicked her out months ago.
"Arn't you going to Eden's wedding" this question came from penny who was starting to get dressed.
"I dont think so" I replied "but can you give her my gift please." penny just looked at me and then spoke"why dont you just give it to her your self"
"never mine then i'll just ask lena to ..." just as I was about to finish lena aked
"ask me what" "I was going to ask you if you can please give Eden my gift "
"why are'nt you going to her wedding" she asked in a mad tone "no I would'nt feel right going " I said in a sad voice
"well you should be sad because even when she forgave you you still did'nt even bother to talk to her" penny said looking at me with disgust.
"why can't you give her your gift , I mean she coming by in an hour to pick us up and you can tell her your not going and then give her gift." lena said also getting dressed for the wedding.
" fine I'll give it to her myself then."
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"hey guys you ready to go" Eden asked
"yea let me just get my purse " I saw penny run into the house and grab her purse.
"Eden outside this is your time to give her your gift and tell her that your not going to her wedding" she scolded
"I changed my mine I'm going now" I said putting on the dress that Eden had given me for one of her brides maids.
"good then hurry up you dont want to keep your date waiting" penny said smiling
"I don't have a date what talking about"I asked suprised
"you'll see come on hurry up, I'll tell Eden your getting ready." penny said running out the house.
I finaly was finished and then gave my self one last look and said to my self" theirs no turning back now"
I went outside and saw penny, lena, and talking to each other then stop and look at me.
"it's about time girl , your date was begining to worry that you were'nt coming" Eden said lauging a little.
"I would'nt miss you wedding day for nothing Eden, sorry i did'nt talk to you any.."
just as I was going to apologize she cut in and said
"save your apologeze I already for gave you no come on your going to make late for my wedding."
as we were driving to the church Eden got a call on cell phone and she just answered " yea were almost their I would'nt leave you at the altar I love to dame much to hurt you."
when we finally got to the church we were 10 minuets late but Eden just kept telling to stop apologizing .
The music started to play and Penny and her date were the first one's to go down the alter, then Lena and her date , I'm still wondering who my date was and then I saw him I could'nt beleive it was him.
"hey you ready to go"


any comments are welcome don't be afraid to tell me what I need to work on ( thnks again leigh for telling me to put spaces I hope you can read it better now)

Soooo much better, thanks!

Anyway, it's a sweet little fic....:)

L.

Chapter 5:
(same day)
Anamaries pov:
"Hey you ready to go"
I could'nt answer I was still in shock of who was standing in front of me.
"hello anamarie are you okay"
"yeah i'm fine sorry for taking so long." I managed to say still surprised.
"you must be wondering wha..." before he could finish Eden cut him off
" Matt and anamarie it's your turn to go come on I dont think John can wait any longer."
she looked so beutiful I've never seen her this happy before.
" yeah sorry Eden." Matt said
" well hurry up then." she said pushing me and Matt in front of the door way.
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"Do you Eden take John to be your husband ?"
"I do." she looked so happy when she said that and a little tear fell from her eyes down her cheack and Jhon wiped it off with his sleve which made her cry and laugh a little.
" Do you John take Eden to be your wife?"
"I do "
John also was starting to shed a tear and Eden cleaned it off for him which made their guest laugh a little.
even though it was a nice wedding I could'nt stop looking at Matt the whole time.
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(after the wedding, during the reception)
Edens pov:
I could'nt be happier then I am at this moment I'm with the man I love and my family that I love so much. I'm also happy because the contest has been set back a couple more months so it will be held at least 11 months from now which gives me more time to practise and spend with my new husband.
" are you okay." John asked
" you seem like you got something on your mind." he finished asking me
"actually their is something I need to tell you." I said their was another reason why I was happy that the contest was set back.
" whats wrong your not havingsecond thoughts are you because if you are..." I cut him off before he could finish.
" I'm pregnant."

any comments or suggestions please let me know.

OMG she's pregnant!? :lol: Update soon I want to know what happens next.

[B]Chapter 6:
(at the reception about two minuets later)
Anamarie's pov:
" so I guess your wondering what I'm doing here huh" Matt said as I just kept
looking at him in total shock that he was still here.
" yeah " i said barely noticeable
" well a while back after you went to do your thing and I went to do my thing Eden had called me and told me you were coming back to the surf contest and well thats all I needed to know so I told my maneger that I was taking a vacation for a couple of months."
"so you came all the way here just to see me?" I asked happy but still wondering why he would come here after we broke up before I started any of my contest.
" well yeah are'nt you happy I came to see you." when Matt said that he sounded so sad but I was happy that he came to see me .
" Matt of course..." I was cut off by John who was saying that he had important news to tell everyone .
" I have wonderful news that I my self have just found out." when john said that I looked at Eden and she looked so happy and just kept smiling so I just wondering what the news could be.
" Eden has just told me that she is expecting are first child." I was shocked and was wondering why Eden had'nt told me first she knows I dont like secrets and yet she did'nt tell me I'll have to ask her later after she is alone for a minuet.
" so in honor of are first child I decided to swicth jobs from police officer to doctor just to be safe so heres a toast to my beutiful wife and are unborn child."
" wow can you beleive that your going to be an aunt" Matt said taking me away from my previuse thoughts.
" yeah I could'nt be happier." I said now going back to my previouse thought .
" come ana were going to say congrats to Eden and John." penny and lena said from behind me now was my chance to ask Eden why she did'nt tell me first.
" John do you mind if we steal your wife for a bit." lena said grabbing Eden by the hand.
" just don't take to long we have to get up arly tommorow to go to are honeymoon." John said giving Eden a kiss on the cheack.
so we went outside and sat on the sand and started to talk about what Eden was going to name the her kid.
" so I think if it's a girl you should have the honor of naming her after me me ." Lena said and Eden laughed and said
" yeah I'll keep that in mind."
" so what if it's a boy" penny said
" I was thinking I could name him after John father Chirs, but I haven't told him that yet."
I did'nt want to sound mean or anything but I just had to know why she did'nt tell me first.
" Eden can I ask you a question " I said trying not to sound mean
" sure Anamarie go ahead" she said still laughing from something that Lena said before.
" well I was just wondering why you did'nt tell me that you pregnant first."
" anamarie can't you think of someone else but yourself for once." Penny said with agression in her voice and giving me a dirty look.
" no it's okay Penny I knew you were going to ask me that , well I guess the only thing I can tell is that I did'nt tell you first because it doesn't really concern you as much as it concerns me and John." She said I took that offensivly I dont know why but I just kept asking questions and I was'nt surprised when Eden had enough and just left.

any comments or suggestions please let me know

It's a nice starter fic, really. It's very condensed and rushed but I get what your trying to accomplish with it. Now that you're spacing it it's much easier to read.

Not bad, you should keep writing more and continue to develope and expand your style. :)

L.

i'm just going to skip to the last the last chapter which is at the contest and Eden already had her kid which was a boy and named it Chirs so this chapter will be up tommorow and it's between Anamarie and Eden to see who is going to be the champ.

Cool. :)

L.

Last chapter
(last ride of the day and it comes down to Eden and Anamarie to see who the winner will be)

Announcers pov:
"Well this is it folks the last wave of the day and it's between last years best rider Anamarie and the sort of new comer Eden."
" The wave is finally coming and lets see who will be the first to charge it it's the biggest wave of the contest so who ever is planning on charging it has to be careful "
" well looks like Eden is going to charge the wave if she makes it then she will be the winner contest."
" she's lining up beutifully and I think she's going to make it , hold on a second theirs another big wave coming from behind this wave and it took Anamarie off guard she's is not noticable out in the water and what is Eden doing I can't beleive she is bailing out on the wave and swimming back towards Anamarie to see if she can help she to is now completly under water I can see that her husband has a worrid look on his face and is imediatly going over to one of the jetskies and riding out to where his wife and Anamarie where last seen before they were completly covered in the wave is still crashing about so I dont know if he will be able to reach them in a fast speed."
" I can see someone finally coming out of the water and it's Eden trying to hold on to Anamarie who seems to be passed out John is finally reaching the girls and Eden is putting on Anamarie first on the back of the jetskie and I think she telling John to go J ohn looks at her her and wispers something and then leaves oh my god this wave does not seem to end and yet again we can not see Eden she is under water.
" People we ask you to please move out of the way when the jetskie is approachimg the beach."
" John is finally back on the beach and the medics are rushing over their and putting a passed out Anamarie on a carrying board and taking her over to the tent her family is close behind her."
" John is getting back on jetskie and trying to get to Eden as fast as he can I still can not see Eden , John is jumping into the water and going under ."
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( 10 minuets later)
" I can now see John and he has Eden in his arms her head seems to bleeding John is carefully putting her on the back of the jetskie and is rushing over to the beach."
" John has reached the beached and is carrying Eden to the tent where he can help her looks family of Eden is following behind them with their son ."


sorry I did'nt post sooner but I'll try to post the rest of the ending up tommorow

any comments please let me know how you feel about the fic it was my first one.

please add more! there are few blue crush fics. i love this one :grin: :lol:

Coolll

hmm. i LIKE it! it's prety good, you said this was ur first fiction? hmm, keep it up!

I think it's really good!
Very creative and well thought out. It's just that I always thought of Eden as someone who wouldn't just settle down like that and get pregnant and married. I think she's more of an independent spirit.

cool B)